Saturday, December 4, 2010

Across the Strait

I begin to see the raindrops
In the distance.
I can’t hear the pitter-patter
Or feel the soaking dripping cold
Of the remote pouring.
I’m in the warm sunlight
Watching rain across the waters.
This strait—
Seeming a gulf—
Between
Places;
Here and there
People;
I and you
Cultures;
Us and them
Rends
Perceptions from reality
Scattering the truth like raindrops
In the distance.

12 comments:

  1. Very pretty, I love the flow! I love the last line, most" Perceptions from reality scattering the truth like raindrops in the distance"
    Great Job~

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  2. //Perceptions from reality
    Scattering the truth like raindrops
    // I loved these lines... very deep and thoughful write

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  3. Thanks for joining Poet's Unite. Fine work!

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  4. There's something about a body of water that just takes you out of yourself...

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  5. Great write! loved the last bit ' perceptions from reality scattering the truth like raindrops'
    your words flowed through me
    thank you

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  6. This was lovely, very tranquil and soothing.

    I just checked with Poets United and we're in the same group. It's nice to meet you and I look forward to reading more of your poetry.

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  7. Thank you everyone for your comments. I read each one of them and I appreciate them all.
    I don't only write for myself, I write for all of you.

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  8. loved the last line. :)

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  9. Oh.. this was some excellent imagery, Fyodor... and a thought very well organised in words too!
    All these cultures and diversities scattered like raindrops -- a neat analogy!! Me likes!!

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