Ah, I see in your smile
A recent visit from the bird
Who marks our faces
Crow’s feet
Or raven’s
Around the eyes
He lands
And leaves his mark
Then flies
"Caw"
Shattering the sound
Of safety
Show your mark
Show your raven-scar
Show where he stood
And printed
Eulogies to come
Show your crow-scar
With a smile
And a wink
Laugh along with
The black-winged joker
His sign was known
Before it marked your face
His sign is hidden
In the soft skin
Of babies
He even lands on the womb
So do not fret
His constant flight
Overhead
His cackling
Caws
His dark aspect
Do not worry
When he comes
To mark your eyes
But laugh
Laugh with the crow
And raven
Laugh that soon this coil
Will unravel
And release
Its tainted captor
To what?
To where?
Perhaps some distant shore
Some sunrise
Or sunset
But never
Nevermore.
vivid capture of emotions conjectured with beautiful nature images,
ReplyDeletefabulous entry.
Thanks for sharing!
Beautiful poem. Right from the beginning I knew I would like :)
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Perhaps some distant shore
Some sunrise
Or sunset
But never
Nevermore. ... I wish I was off to some sunrise on other shore ...
Agree with your well-expressed sentiments completely. Those marks are the mark of being human, of life's passage and inevitable finish. Excellent piece.
ReplyDeleteThe symbolism is quite striking.
ReplyDeleteGood stuff.
Powerful--love the ending.
ReplyDeletewonderful n powerful.excellent poem:)
ReplyDeletebrilliant brilliant and more brilliant, and again :D
ReplyDeleteExcellent work... :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing. I truly enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteNicely done.
ReplyDeleteHi, I'm here again to read again about this sunshine and shore you wrote so lovely about,
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Fydor, this is masterful. Raven and crow certainly have etched their marks on my face and I see it as a badge of honor (and survival). No plastic surgery for this girl. I especially like this:
ReplyDeleteLaugh that soon this coil
Will unravel
And release
Its tainted captor
Victoria
http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/11/27/b-is-for-bougainvillea/
i love the metaphor of life...amazing poem:)Great imagery:)
ReplyDeleteAmazing work! Your symbolism is so clever (do I detect a reference to Poe's Raven in the last line?)
ReplyDeleteWell done, excellent poem!
Yes! Definitely a reference to Poe. I'm glad you caught it, I was beginning to think nobody noticed. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments. And thank you to all of you for your kind comments!
very nicely done,
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful and thought provoking Fyodor!
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Marvelous poem. Poe would be honored!
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http://seasweetie.wordpress.com/2010/12/01/haiku/
I love the thought of Raven and Crow leaving their mark, wonderful!
ReplyDeleteSuch an awesome poem! I love your blog and your blog's header picture!
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